Sean Michael Robinson:
Greetings!
The restoration work is all done on Minds, as of Friday morning! Which leaves me with just a few loose ends to wrap up.
As we've done in the past, I'm looking to you, Cerebus restoration patrons and fans, to help in this final polish.
Some of these things are definitely in the "picking at nits" category, but, hey, when has that stopped us in the past? If you're the type of person bothered by minute grammatical distinctions, or horrified that we're proofreading and editing twenty-year-old comics, please consider yourself warned and read no further!
Without further ado—
Page 52 panel 2 — the reverse lettering has been damaged, either when shooting the photostat or the negative itself. Because of this, it's not clear what might be missing from the first panel. My best guess (and proofreader Jeff Seiler's guess as well!) is that there were two ellipses after each "A". Which would look like this—
So -- yay or nay?
Page 82 --
Cerebus' father visits Magus Doran for help with his problem child.
Proofreader Jeff suggests adding commas throughout Cerebus' father's speech. For instance, "Th' hat. 'Is Mum's idea it was." would become, ""Th' hat. 'Is Mum's idea, it was." He's suggesting four on this page.
To my sensibilities these are unnecessary, and the absence of the commas here is actually working to communicating the rhythm of his speech patterns. So I have a strong "no" here myself, but wanted to run this by you all as well. (And Dave!)
Yay or nay?
Page 205—
In panel 3 the Dave character says to Cerebus: "...with no regard for the ideal "nature"-? A mistake grounded in his blind belief in iconolatry."
Jeff Seiler points out — "The OED defines ICONOLATRY as: the worship of religious images or icons. Thus, the phrase "belief in iconolatry" is redundant. A better wording would be "practice of iconolatry" or just take out "belief" and make it "blind iconolatry."
Normally, I'm against "correcting" dialogue. After all, couldn't the speaker be in error? But should this general tendency to leave well enough alone change when the speaker is, in a certain way, also the author?
Any thoughts on this? Leave as is, or change to one of Jeff's suggestions?
Page 152—
In the second word balloon, Dave lists the Five Cornerstones of Cirinism, followed by a colon, and then each cornerstone listed individually, terminated by a period. Jeff desires these periods to be semicolons instead, and while that might be slightly more correct on some Algebra of Grammar level, on an aesthetic level, it looks wrong, and seems to unnecessarily complicate the structure of this section.
Anyone want to stick up for Jeff's semicolon suggestion?
Page 245—
Cerebus is about to have his "injury-to-eye" experience, whilst "Dave" quotes Pink Floyd lyrics to him. In panel five, the lone balloon says,
"PIN
PRICK"
Unfortunately, according to that pesky OED, and the Pink Floyd lyrics in question, it's "pinprick."
So, change to
"PINPRICK"
or preserve the rhythm of the sung lyric by changing it to
"PIN-
PRICK"
?
Or, "LEAVE MY FAVORITE COMIC ALONE YOU MONSTERS, WHAT HAVE YOU DONE DEAR GOD WHAT HAVE YOU DONE"
Pages 104, 105, 100, 101, 110
These pages have larger image areas than the surrounding pages (as befits the scale changes depicted in the drawings themselves.) Unfortunately, that means when I enlarge these images to 104 percent of their original size (as the rest of the artwork has been enlarged), there's no room left for page numbers on these pages.
So I could
a. shrink the artwork a bit for these pages
b. leave the page numbers off for these pages (what I'm inclined to do!)
c. put a small white box over the artwork to accommodate the black page number
d. WHO CARES YOU MONSTER YOU'VE ALREADY RUINED THE WHOLE THING
Page 270
In the third panel, Cerebus says,
"AYE.
SO ALL CEREBUS
HAS TO DO IS
NOT ANYTHING
INTERESTING..."
Which Jeff believes should be
"AYE.
SO ALL CEREBUS
HAS TO DO IS
NOT DO ANYTHING
INTERESTING..."
I could go either way on this one. It's freezing, Cerebus is miserable and not at his most articulate. Is this a "mistake" of the character, or did "The Letterer" just leave out a word accidentally?
Finally, the end
The last decision is the one I could use the most input on. Unlike the majority of the books so far, MINDS is already the perfect length to accommodate the signature length of our new paper (which need to be multiples of 16 pages). Which means, we can either not add any pages of length, or we'd need to add sixteen pages to add any at all.
Which means, if we don't add any physical pages, then we have either one or two pages total to fit in the following--
a. Cerebus Archive thank-yous
b. credits on the restoration, scanning, copy edit, etc
c. Aardvark-Vanaheim address and book logo
d. Art Dragnet credits and thank-yous
e. any art enlargements
I say "one or two," because for the first time, I'm considering using the facing page of the last story page of the book.
I've avoided it before because I think it typically looks pretty tacky, but it doesn't seem quite as bad to me this time as the last story page is really an advertisement for the next volume anyway.
Any thoughts on this? Should I cram it all into one page to preserve that last white space at the end of the story? Or spread it out over two? Something else?? If we do use both pages, what image might you want to see enlarged for the final page?
And that's where Minds is at! Looking forward to your magical solutions.