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Benjamin Hobbs:

Two weeks ago I sent Dave six strips, five of which were included in LEAGUE OF EXTRAORDINARY CORONA. This is the sixth:

Dave faxed some suggestions for rewriting this strip:

After reading his suggestions, I agree with Dave that the strip doesn't build to the punchline, although I disagree that the focus should be on the NUMBER of screens. There are several half ideas all crammed into one strip.  The ideas should have been spread out on a number of strips, focusing less on the number of screens, and more on the amount of screen time.

The finished strips will appear in future  Daily CIH?!